Monday, February 22, 2010

Whoops! Blogfest – Steam Palace


Here’s my entry in the Whoops! Blogfest. Click the link to find the other entries.

NOTE: Prudencia has just arrived home after a long journey where she had gone missing and presumed dead. From my WIP Steam Palace.

The sounds of crying met her at the door. She rushed up to Bea's bedroom to find the woman on the edge of her bed, her head on her hands, sobbing. "Aunt Bea! Aunt Bea! I'm home! I'm alive."

"Oh, Prudencia!" The women hugged. "I heard you were well yesterday. I'm so relieved you're back. But that's not why I'm crying."

Prudencia released the woman. "What is it, Auntie? Why are you so sad?"

Bea flopped onto the bed. "I just completed a visit with my physician."

An icy hand gripped Prudencia's heart. "Oh, no. Please don't tell me you're at death's door. I couldn't stand it."

"No, no. It's much worse. I'm so ashamed. All my life, I've lived a certain way, believed certain things. And now—Oh, Prudencia, what am I to do?"

"Bea, what is it? What happened? Is it a dreadful disease? A hideous infection?" Prudencia couldn't fathom what upset her Aunt so.

"I cannot bring my lips to say it."

"Beatrice Harwinton, tell me this instant what is going on."

The woman swallowed. "I—I—I'm pregnant!"




  1. Whoops indeed. I'm guessing Auntie is not exactly a spring chicken?

    Thanks for participating in the fest and helping to make it fabulous.

  2. The scene goes on to discuss how Bea thought she was "too old" to conceive but the doctor says that it's not unheard of. This would be her first child, and no she's not married. She's in her early 40's.

  3. Hehehe, she probably did something to get that condition. Whoops indeed. LOL.

  4. Oh, man! That's bad. Aunt Bea will be ruined. If my memory serves, society is very old world in you novel, yes? Yipes!

  5. *your novel...geez, talk about embarrassing!

  6. Um. Uh oh. That's a heck of a whoops. Great dialogue.

  7. Whoops indeed. Somebody has some explaining to do.

  8. The beginning Andrew! I need to know "how" she got pregnant.

    Dude; that was cool. For a woman; nothing can be a greater Whoops. You've really captured a moment here.


  9. Thanks for all the comments!
    Don't worry, it all works out.
    It is a very WHOOPS moment though...


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