Excerpt of Dawn’s Rise with Edits!
Victoria Mixon was gracious enough to do a one-page edit of the “hook” for Dawn’s Rise. You can check it out here. Please read the rules before making any comments on her page. However, feel free to leave any comments here. I believe she is still offering free one-page edits of your hook if you’re interested. 150 word max.
I’m always amazed by how much crap I throw into my writing that can be edited out. And yet I still have readers who get confused.