tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post3420981600202796377..comments2023-07-23T02:07:51.261-07:00Comments on Dawn's Rise: Internal Conflict Blogfest – Steam PalaceAndrew Rosenberghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-33589063307950435802010-05-14T11:04:57.829-07:002010-05-14T11:04:57.829-07:00Wow - great tension in this piece! I popped over ...Wow - great tension in this piece! I popped over from Tara's blog to say hi after seeing you were tagged. :-)<br /><br />Have a great weekend!Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-78207492729206972552010-05-13T14:23:55.206-07:002010-05-13T14:23:55.206-07:00@VR: That surprised me too...I thought someone wou...@VR: That surprised me too...I thought <i>someone</i> would be put off by his desire....and if this had been a more intimate genre he might very well have pounced<br /><br />@Mia: Murder is hard work!<br /><br />@Okie: Yeah, I'm hoping to drive him to some dark areas.<br /><br />@Raquel: I don't think balm is what he's after...more like control. I think another thing that may not be evident her is that she scares the shit out of him.<br /><br />@Genie: He's not really "in-the-mood". But I want to stay away from the more morbid/violent images..Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-11807919851378038272010-05-13T13:27:55.405-07:002010-05-13T13:27:55.405-07:00Maybe my husband overshares, but I don't think...Maybe my husband overshares, but I don't think men with inappropriate sexual urges are at all out of the ordinary! He'd only be "bad" if he went for it with no restraint.<br /><br />It is kinda funny how he can be so in-the-mood while in so much pain! But I guess that's believable, too. ;)Jean Michelle Miernikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08971882597502010124noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-77704901621187590662010-05-13T12:31:36.496-07:002010-05-13T12:31:36.496-07:00Thomas seems to be in a very bad place. Injured, ...Thomas seems to be in a very bad place. Injured, feeling like he's lost so much...and now he seeks to balm his wounds with this woman? I think he's in for a lot more heartache. Great post!Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-1401606069182683962010-05-13T09:51:24.278-07:002010-05-13T09:51:24.278-07:00I don't think this casts a particularly bad li...I don't think this casts a particularly bad light on Thomas. Rather it gives him added depth of character that makes him more human. It's that kind of depth that attracts me to characters and makes their successes all the more triumphant.Okiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01393689307300304035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-27074620832471157312010-05-13T02:14:50.157-07:002010-05-13T02:14:50.157-07:00See, I wish I could write internal conflict like t...See, I wish I could write internal conflict like this. Nobody died and yet we're kept reading by the inner struggle. Well played.<br /><br />I just wish I could do this osrt of thing without murder *facepalm* or zombies<br /><br />Great entry :~)Mia Haysonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01041441666482084762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-13853867937185937222010-05-12T17:51:48.792-07:002010-05-12T17:51:48.792-07:00Excellent scene! That he wants to have his way wit...Excellent scene! That he wants to have his way with her and protect her all at once is textbook inner conflict finely and uniquely wrought. And how could you cast a bad light on Thomas? He does right - at least in this scene. I am amused that so many women wish he'd pounced, while the men appreciate the tension created by his self restraint. This is a gender study waiting to happen...VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-65680153767265648082010-05-12T16:59:23.506-07:002010-05-12T16:59:23.506-07:00@Amalia: He's a pretty decent guy.
@Eric: If ...@Amalia: He's a pretty decent guy.<br /><br />@Eric: If this was a more...impulsive...genre they would be doing stuff. But they will meet again...and he might not be this restrain...<br /><br />@SJS: Thanks!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-64794527832009870412010-05-12T16:36:26.091-07:002010-05-12T16:36:26.091-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-7203994206665620912010-05-12T16:30:58.453-07:002010-05-12T16:30:58.453-07:00Great job building the tension here. Gotta feel fo...Great job building the tension here. Gotta feel for poor Thomas.sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-36629758399453410262010-05-12T16:30:12.054-07:002010-05-12T16:30:12.054-07:00I would TOTALLY kiss a crippled chick.
Lots harde...I would TOTALLY kiss a crippled chick.<br /><br />Lots harder for them to run away, see.<br /><br />And if he plays his cards right, maybe he can guilt her into, you know, doing stuff.<br /><br /> - EricEric W. Tranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13842968931062056407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-46851598951319544772010-05-12T11:38:54.323-07:002010-05-12T11:38:54.323-07:00I think the only way it could reflect poorly on Th...I think the only way it could reflect poorly on Thomas would be if he acted upon it without her consent, honestly. I mean, I have a hard time believing that every man doesn't feel that way at some point or another-- and his final feelings are to protect her, not dominate her, so he redeems himself anyway!Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-80500318191337574622010-05-12T11:21:02.991-07:002010-05-12T11:21:02.991-07:00got it! thanks matey ;)got it! thanks matey ;)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-69218801451892362062010-05-12T11:19:38.583-07:002010-05-12T11:19:38.583-07:00Done and done. BTW, anyone who comments, I will be...Done and done. BTW, anyone who comments, I will be visiting your blog, and if I don't leave a comment feel free to call me on it!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-30094793357940830822010-05-12T11:02:16.384-07:002010-05-12T11:02:16.384-07:00What the--
I thought I did!
Will correct presently...What the--<br />I thought I did!<br />Will correct presently...Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-56758386435965361752010-05-12T11:00:13.984-07:002010-05-12T11:00:13.984-07:00Oi! You! Yeah, the guy with the funny hat ;)You...Oi! You! Yeah, the guy with the funny hat ;)You've been riding round the blogoshere today but haven't dropped by mine! What's going on, yo? I'm the freakin host! LOL I think you deserve a smack. Hold out your hand ...Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-45033656830797346072010-05-12T10:54:32.950-07:002010-05-12T10:54:32.950-07:00@Roland: You know I love your stuff, so anything y...@Roland: You know I love your stuff, so anything you say to me counts double in my book! <br /><br />@Donna: Yeah, she's a little oblivious, but her mind isn't completely innocent here...<br /><br />@Tina: Right on!<br /><br />@TAA: He could never betray her trust like that...stupid Hero character! <br /><br />@Sangu: Yup he helped her escape from a dirigible attack...right after a wolf attack. Partly why all the juices are flowing.<br /><br />@stu: Yeah, self-restrain sucks!<br /><br />@cat: Thanks, I was a bit worried he was too edgy.<br /><br />@Bridge: Thanks. Glad everyone is on Thomas's side.<br /><br />@Tesse: Damn straight. What do you think goes through a married/committed guy's head when he's with an attractive girl? If he says "nothing" then he's lying. ;)<br /><br />@Tara: Like he says, something about her brings out the best in him...but there's another woman who will bring out the worst...Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-10570080410802286742010-05-12T10:12:35.262-07:002010-05-12T10:12:35.262-07:00Bad light? What! And you said you didn't have ...Bad light? What! And you said you didn't have a bad boy...<br /><br />This is a terrific scene - great sexual energy and tension.<br /><br />I want more of Thomas!Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09008153523366719973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-45259173077110680552010-05-12T10:01:58.197-07:002010-05-12T10:01:58.197-07:00I think most gentlemen would actually really rathe...I think most gentlemen would actually really rather not be...now I know what it must look like in their heads!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-75027245451829065762010-05-12T09:40:13.091-07:002010-05-12T09:40:13.091-07:00Nice internal conflict, you definitely got me wond...Nice internal conflict, you definitely got me wondering about what else is going on, and I don't think Thomas was cast in a bad light, given the circumstances.Bridge Mariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06687000732188023868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-80403024064927513682010-05-12T08:17:13.663-07:002010-05-12T08:17:13.663-07:00Nice internal conflict, Andrew. You also did a gr...Nice internal conflict, Andrew. You also did a great job of getting your readers in a conflict. To pounce or not to pounce...?<br /><br />That was a fun read and one that definitely doesn't cast Thomas as anything but human.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-33745404038934102182010-05-12T06:56:51.119-07:002010-05-12T06:56:51.119-07:00I liked the tension created by the self restraint ...I liked the tension created by the self restraint here.stuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16388674850920848503noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-1475626218833808672010-05-12T05:36:15.986-07:002010-05-12T05:36:15.986-07:00Thomas is fun, I wish he had just pounced too! Lov...Thomas is fun, I wish he had just pounced too! Loved the opening line with the dirigibles thrown in, it surprised me in a great way!Sangu Mandannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464061265952789628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-69891573478314866232010-05-12T03:23:19.308-07:002010-05-12T03:23:19.308-07:00No bad light hath been shed on dear Thomas ;)
This...No bad light hath been shed on dear Thomas ;)<br />This was great! Very sexy and riveting. I wish he had just pounced, to be honest! Nothing like a good injury and a few drugs to get those passions flowing. :)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5042906897152963913.post-63723046186604684062010-05-12T00:49:49.528-07:002010-05-12T00:49:49.528-07:00Nice. I almost wished he would have given in, but ...Nice. I almost wished he would have given in, but then there would have been no conflict. And I don't see how this could cast a bad light on Thomas. We all have needs:)Tina Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05914428134837892539noreply@blogger.com